You hear a distant echoing dripping and you think underneath that you can make out a deep breathing noise. The breaths are wet and laboured, but cavernous as if the very room itself is struggling for air. Beneath your feet the floor is a well worn dark stone, wet with some kind of foul smelling moisture. The room is poorly lit and you have no idea what the space around you is like. There are others with you. Your colleagues shamble on blindly, with arms outstretched hoping desperately to feel out something in the dark that will help guide them or at last indicate where they might be. The sounds you had heard when you first entered the space recede to be replaced with the shuffling and concerned murmurings of your fellow coworkers.
RIP P-987. Despite most of the beginning being narrated in 2nd person (ie: you do x y and z), the line 'my colleagues are screaming' is presented in first person, creating slight dissonance when reading. Hm.... very good, but needs a bit more meat. Meat/10, would recommend.
Switching between first and second person seemingly for no reason is a very advance meaty writing trick. Only a writer as talented and juicy as Overlord Chris Cutlets can pull it off.
The suspense is going to kill me! What type of animal emerged from the geyser?! I hope it has a healthy glisten to it... hearing about dry meats always causes my dopamine receptor to malfunction.
Truly such an incredible in person reading, it really drew my immersion into The Flappening even more. What a wonderful piece of fiction, the enjoyment I get from it is perhaps almost as much from consuming a wonderfully delicious plate of Chicky Lumps, though the battle for dominance with the Chicky Lumps always extends the prep time.
Next time I see my meaty little hermster SPAM I will put him in my pocket.
All hail out meaty overlords!
Just remember only one Hermster per pocket! They're very territorial!
What an adorable hermster!! It is an especially meaty little fella, I bet you don’t skimp on the chutney, haha!
RIP P-987. Despite most of the beginning being narrated in 2nd person (ie: you do x y and z), the line 'my colleagues are screaming' is presented in first person, creating slight dissonance when reading. Hm.... very good, but needs a bit more meat. Meat/10, would recommend.
Switching between first and second person seemingly for no reason is a very advance meaty writing trick. Only a writer as talented and juicy as Overlord Chris Cutlets can pull it off.
The suspense is going to kill me! What type of animal emerged from the geyser?! I hope it has a healthy glisten to it... hearing about dry meats always causes my dopamine receptor to malfunction.
Truly such an incredible in person reading, it really drew my immersion into The Flappening even more. What a wonderful piece of fiction, the enjoyment I get from it is perhaps almost as much from consuming a wonderfully delicious plate of Chicky Lumps, though the battle for dominance with the Chicky Lumps always extends the prep time.
Thank you ever so much! I love what your mind spews out at us 🥰